As much as I hate clocks....
I really don't like Clock movies but it wasn't so bad as to be blammed...
Honestly, I voted '2' and I get ...
"You're the saviour! You are one of a number of people who have helped keep this entry in the Portal!"
I almost feel a little dirty now...
Not bad animation really - but please consider something other than cc stuff - from what I've seen you should be able to get your stuff through the portal without the cc votes.
Watch, The SpaceShip Battle
And Hidraolic Madness
Those movies arent Clocks
Nice job...
You did a really good job - I think you're off to a good start but I'd reconsider using this piece to get work... This isn't bad at all but it's also not extraordinary. (There's also the PC crap to consider - which is VERY real in the corporate world where nobody wants to upset anyone for fear of losing business) I'm assuming that you modelled, rigged textured and animated everything yourself. That's great - it shows that you have a well rounded set of skills - This may be good enough to land a small job or two - and If you're planning on a series of smaller clients who will want you to handle all production yourself, then you should be alright - but larger clients with bigger jobs usually employ a team of people in which case you should hone one particular skill or another until you are the very best at it out of everyone else. I know people who can model like you wouldn't believe but leave the texturing and rigging for others - and I also know people who may not be able to model very well but can rig up a character breathing an amazing amount of life into a scene -
Either way - it's great work so far - Sorry if I'm coming off sounding negative - I'm not meaning to - I really hope you make it! Don't get discouraged - any media work is a super tough and very competitive business (trust me I know) and you'll hear a thousand "No"'s but eventually you'll get your foot in the door and it'll all be worth it!
Hoping to see more from you!
ljCoffee...
You are absolutely right, and this is what my profs would've said too. I modelled, textured, rigged, lit everything myself because I hated the generic assignment characters/scenes they gave me... that's why :P I will eventually focus just solely on animation.
Nice job...
I'm assuming that you are turning this in to a school for credit? - in that case then I doubt file size is much of a consideration but for submission here well... another story... You mentioned that you had to remove a scene to get the size down... That's too bad considering that I'm wagering MOST of the size was in the audio - You could've probably compressed the audio more without losing much quality.. the graphics are a different thing altogether - you CAN compress those additionally but you need a third party tool like 'Optimaze' to do it - works really well and will generally crunch your vectors down by about 40 - 50 % - that combined with sacrificing a wee bit on the audio and pushing the compression down to maybe 32 or 48k and this submission might have been under 3MB or even 2.5 ...
Enough about compression though - You did a really good job - I can tell that you worked hard on it and you deserve to get your submission through the portal.
Keep it up!
My teacher helped me reduce the size a bit, so i will have the other scene in tomorow or something. I had to sacrifice some audio though.
Not bad but...
How many times do you REALLY think you need to mention your name in opening credits? And are the fake ones even necessary? - Alot of people make this mistake but you should cut out the crap that's really not necessary and meaningless - eg: "Blah Blah productions presents..." - Sorry but you really aren't a production house - you don't need a fake name as it doesn't give you any credibility. "Directed by: Blah Blah" - Unless you actually worked with a team of people you did not "direct" you either created or animated - period - You COULD also save us a little on the front end by listing EVERYTHING at once... There is nothing wrong with ONE SCREEN that says:
Story, animation, sound engineering, illustration and animation by:
Your Name Here...
Other that those comments it wasn't a bad animation.
Good luck!
Not stolen but....
There seems to be an awful lot of complaints about stolen work... I don't think this would qualify as stolen but it is definitely a rip-off of previous work... The idea is not very original - but I would NOT call you a thief for it - just uninspired -
Sorry but I need to addres the others for a moment...
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TO ALL WHO ARE CRYING THIEF! - Why are you coming down so hard on this author and yet every time another one of a thousand people submit a crappy stick fight or a lousy frame by frame dot moving and morphing around you are silent? - After all those thousand swf's are "stolen" by your definitions and yet you vote them through alot of the time.
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Back to the author - the only thing you are guilty of is not being original enough - your submission was VERY short - it wasn't great and my scores reflect this but I wouldn't say that this was stolen work - just copied from another idea...
Keep trying - and remember - the next time you have an idea - chances are goos that others have similar ideas as well so you've got to get yours out there FIRST - that way eeryone ELSE is called a thief and yours is the original - sometimes it's just a matter of timing...
Not bad but...
AlbinoBlackSheep?
is that where you downloaded it from or where you submitted it to first?
is it truly your own work?
Very nice work.
Wery well put together - nicely illustrated and animated - and definitely original.
The sound was good - the story itself was intriguing and the animation made it easy to watch. Very dark - emotionally - which is good - the fact that you provoked any thought or emotion at all is impressive given the usual stick fights and numa dances that flood the portal...
If this was your first work then I would love to see additional works if you decide to continue authoring in flash.
Great job!
yes this was my first attempt with flash. I started working on it in November 2004. Flash is a very difficult program to pick up and learn so it took time to get to this stage.
I wanted to create something that you guys would like and i am glad it was worth the time investment for you.
Not terrible... not spectacular...
OK, fair and honest review...
The sound could be improved - you went from way too loud to suddenly cutting to silence or very near it... this felt way too trite... I think that a more subtle soundtrack that built up slowly would have been more effective in increasing tension. As it is it felt like watching one of those cheesy 50's B-movie horror flicks... The graphics weren't bad but there really wasn't much to them - never showing the character at all - could go either way with this. I understand using the 'point of view' for dramatic effect but I also felt like the only reason you didn't show a character was that you couldn't draw a decent one... Not saying that you can't just saying it felt that way... Overall though it was a decent effort and the twist at the end (although nothing to piss oneself over) was a little humorous...
Work on the sound man! I think that if this were scored better (music core not point score), you'd get higher ratings.
Decent job - keep it up as if nothing else it was in fact original...
Thanx, most people are commenting on the music so i'll definitely look into it. i could of drawn the character but it would of taken me a while and i dont think he was all that necessary, thanx for the review tho!
Really really nice job!
Awesome job - really nice conversion from sketch to flash.
Will we see more of this?
Style was great - Solid illustrative skills - Animation was very well done - Are you a pro? if not you should look into it - you've got talent and I'm certain you could find paid work in the field if you haven't already...
Good luck!
I do all of the above. I mean it. I can back it up too.
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