Check your levels...
Since this is one of the first reviews, I'll explain how/why I scored it like I did.
Originality - nothing jumped out at me - it sounded a little contrived honestly but you did try to mix it up a little here and there with the effects...
Claritry - The mastering was a bit on the flimsy side - the percussion was very muddled and the additional effects were all too loud by comparison.
Diversity - This wasn't a bad start but it was too repetitive considering the length - I think that maybe in a 3 or 4 minute track you could get away with the same beat for that long but not in this one.
Effort - it really sounded like you were way too anxious to submit something and threw this together quickly - You'll need to change things up a little - try some variation next time.
Before you get pissed, let me remind you that I'm just trying to help you out.
Although I feel a little bad about it, I'm voting 3 on this - I can't really give you anything higher at this point.
Keep at it - you show some promise but you need more practice.
See you around NG